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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, others think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both ways and give your opinion.

#university #education #job #hand #skills
Education
 and soft
skills
 of a person can go hand in hand. Some people are of opinion that by completing graduation one can land into a good
job
 while others think that on
job
 experience & soft
skills
 are more important. In my opinion, completing
university
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education
 will benefit more. We will discuss both
the
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views in detail
in
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below
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the below
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 paragraphs. Completing
graduation
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a graduation
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 degree is the best way to get a good
job
 for a student.
Firstly
, getting a good understanding
in
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of
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specific
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a specific
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 major will help to work more efficiently when in
on
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on-job
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job
 training.
Also
, there are
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on-campus
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on campus
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 internship programmes that are conducted in the
last
 tenure of the course which will benefit the student to learn some practical ways of working and develop
skills
 like communication. Students will
also
 be able to learn various subjects integrated with their specialization and get a full understanding of a particular subject.
On the other hand
, working without
university
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education
 might impact a person's
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overall
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over all
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overall
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 knowledge. Nowadays, many educational institutes believe in
more
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a more
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 practical approach in terms of
education
, they share
lot
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 of practical experiences.
Moreover
, communication
skills
 can
also
 be developed in college, more personality development classes can be included as a part of
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curriculum
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the curriculam
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curriculam
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curriculum
. To conclude,
Although
, work experience is beneficial to
gain
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 understanding in
practical
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the practical
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 sphere
but
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university
education
 is equally important for students
in
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at
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 the
university
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured and comprehensive understanding
  • specialized skills
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving abilities
  • career advancement
  • networking opportunities
  • internships
  • alumni associations
  • career services
  • practical experience
  • hands-on skills
  • trades, arts, and technology
  • soft skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • real-world working environment
  • job performance
  • career growth
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