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You have learned about an international job that is available within the company you currently work for and you want to apply. Write a letter to the hiring manager. In your letter:   Say why you are applying for this international position   Describe the job you are currently doing for the company   Tell him/her why you think you will be good at the job

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter in connection with an international vacancy which is available within the company in New York . I heard about the vacant position from my senior staff.
Thus
, I want to apply for the above-said job as I want to get better career opportunities. Apart from that, I
also
 wish to
shift
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 there because my family is living there and I
was
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have been
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 living here alone for about 2 years.
Therefore
, I want to continue my services there. Currently, I am working for the post of
an
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apply
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accountant in the organization and offering my services to it for five years. Here, in
this
 position, I am handling all the financial matters related to accounts
as well as
 dealing with the software built for accounting work. I
also
 endeavour my services as a storekeeper and maintain a record of inventory present in the firm. I am very good at a professional level and
in addition
 to it, I
also
 have far better communication skills which are required to work in a foreign nation efficiently and effectively.
Moreover
, I
also
 completed my academic qualification from that country which will be
proved
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beneficial for the firm as I can better understand the
tradition
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 and culture of societies living there.
Therefore
, It would be really appreciable if you could consider my application and allow me to pursue my work from there. Looking forward to hearing a positive reply from your side. Thanks. Yours Faithfully, Kuljeet Kaur.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and that it is organized in a clear and coherent manner.
task achievement
Address all the points mentioned in the prompt clearly and provide specific details to support your application.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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