The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of sodium, saturated fat and added
sugar
in 4 daily meals consumed by USA citizens. Excessive consumption of any type of these nutrients may be detrimental to health. Generally speaking, Americans eat relatively healthier in their first meal of the day because lesser in salt, oil and
sweet
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.
Lunch
and
dinner
contain the highest portions in sodium and fat
while
snacks
have the highest
sugar
level. The first chart shows the daily consumption of sodium.
Dinner
consists of a significant ratio of 43% salt and 29%
in
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lunch
.
Snacks
and breakfast include an equal percentage which is 14%. The
second
chart outlines the percentage of saturated fat,
dinner
has the highest fat which made up
of
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37%,
lunch
contributes 26% followed by 21% in
snacks
and 16% in breakfast. The
last
chart describes added
sugar
in meals,
snacks
hold the highest figures in
sugar
which is 42%.
Dinner
takes up 23% of
sugar
while
lunch
and breakfast contain 19% and 16% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, lunch, dinner, snacks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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