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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of sodium, saturated fat and added
sugar
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 in 4 daily meals consumed by USA citizens. Excessive consumption of any type of these nutrients may be detrimental to health. Generally speaking, Americans eat relatively healthier in their first meal of the day because lesser in salt, oil and
sweet
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sweets
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.
Lunch
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 and
dinner
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 contain the highest portions in sodium and fat
while
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snacks
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 have the highest
sugar
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 level. The first chart shows the daily consumption of sodium.
Dinner
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 consists of a significant ratio of 43% salt and 29%
in
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lunch
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.
Snacks
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 and breakfast include an equal percentage which is 14%. The
second
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 chart outlines the percentage of saturated fat,
dinner
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 has the highest fat which made up
of
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37%,
lunch
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 contributes 26% followed by 21% in
snacks
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 and 16% in breakfast. The
last
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 chart describes added
sugar
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 in meals,
snacks
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 hold the highest figures in
sugar
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 which is 42%.
Dinner
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 takes up 23% of
sugar
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while
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lunch
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 and breakfast contain 19% and 16% respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, lunch, dinner, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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