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Some shops are open 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. Do you think it is a good thing for the customers, shop staff and company as a whole?

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The chart demonstrates the amount of money spent on consumer products in the
UK
 and
France
 in 2010. Units are measured in pounds sterling. Overall, it was clear from the chart that the
UK
's expenditure was higher than that of
France
. Both the French and the British spent the most money on cars, while in the
UK
 the least on perfume, compared to cameras in
France
. In terms of cars, the
UK
 spent around £450,000 on
this
, as opposed to an exact £400,000 in
France
. The cost of books in the
UK
 was higher than in
France
 (about £400,000 and £300,000, respectively).
In addition
, spending on cameras by the British, about £400,000, was much greater than that by the French, around £100,000.
On the contrary
, the amount of money spent on computers in the
UK
 was lower than in
France
, with the figure being around £350,000 and almost £400,000, respectively. The cost of perfume in the
UK
, approximately £100,000, was much lower than in
France
, at nearly £150,000.
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