There is evidence that inhaling cigarette smoke causes health problems not only for smoker but for non-smokers who inhale other people’s smoke. In view of this, smoking should be banned in all public places, even though this would restrict some people’s freedom and action. What are your views?
There are some main
health
problems
that can be caused by inhaling cigarette
smoke
for
non-Change preposition
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smokers
. Non
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Non-smokers
smokers
who inhale smokers
' cigarette
smoke
are called passive smokers
. Health
problems
that a passive smoker could face along with the increasing amount of smoke
inhaled are respiratory problems
such
as lung cancer, pneumonia and the
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. Regarding Add an article
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this
, I firmly believe that smoking should be banned in all public spaces
.
Passive smokers
could face more serious health
problems
than active smokers
. The worst part of being a passive smoker is that anyone could become a passive smoker in any situation where the person is in the same place as active smokers
. With this
being said, passive smokers
could be a
pregnant Correct article usage
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woman
, an infant, Fix the agreement mistake
women
an
elderly Correct article usage
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person
with Fix the agreement mistake
people
health
complications, a teenager with cancer, and so on. Cigarette
smoke
could not only affect passive smokers
' health
but also
endanger their already existing health
problems
. Some people might have
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severe
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severe
health
conditions such
as GERD or tumor
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tumors
with
inhaling Change preposition
by
cigarette
smoke
.
In my opinion, the government and the management of public places should make a
small chambers and outdoor areas designed for active Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
smokers
with the availability of ashtrays. This
would be beneficial not only for active smokers
as they could chat with others while smoking, but it also
would be Add an article
a convenience
convenience
for passive Replace the word
convenient
smokers
who do not prefer to be in contact with cigarette
smoke
and allergic
to it. These chambers and outdoor areas would not restrict people's freedom and action as non-Add a missing verb
are allergic
smokers
including passive smokers
are also
entitled to their rights of being healthy and not be worried of
inhaling Change preposition
about
cigarette
smoke
.
In conclusion, the government should ban smoking in public spaces
. In response to that, the management of public spaces
alongside the government should make a
designated chambers and outdoor Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
spaces
for active smokers
. This
is to protect non-smokers
and passive smokers
from inhaling cigarette
smoke
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