There is evidence that inhaling cigarette smoke causes health problems not only for smoker but for non-smokers who inhale other people’s smoke. In view of this, smoking should be banned in all public places, even though this would restrict some people’s freedom and action. What are your views?

There are some main
health
problems
that can be caused by inhaling
cigarette
smoke
for
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non-
smokers
.
Non
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smokers
who inhale
smokers
'
cigarette
smoke
are called passive
smokers
.
Health
problems
that a passive smoker could face along with the increasing amount of
smoke
inhaled are respiratory
problems
such
as lung cancer, pneumonia and
the
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infection
on
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trachea
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. Regarding
this
, I firmly believe that smoking should be banned in all public
spaces
. Passive
smokers
could face more serious
health
problems
than active
smokers
. The worst part of being a passive smoker is that anyone could become a passive smoker in any situation where the person is in the same place as active
smokers
. With
this
being said, passive
smokers
could be
a
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pregnant
woman
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women
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, an infant,
an
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elderly
person
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people
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with
health
complications, a teenager with cancer, and so on.
Cigarette
smoke
could not only affect passive
smokers
'
health
but
also
endanger their already existing
health
problems
. Some people might
have
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severe
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sever
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health
conditions
such
as GERD or
tumor
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tumors
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that could potentially be harmed
with
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inhaling
cigarette
smoke
. In my opinion, the government and the management of public places should make
a
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small chambers and outdoor areas designed for active
smokers
with the availability of ashtrays.
This
would be beneficial not only for active
smokers
as they could chat with others while smoking, but it
also
would be
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for passive
smokers
who do not prefer to be in contact with
cigarette
smoke
and
allergic
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to it. These chambers and outdoor areas would not restrict people's freedom and action as non-
smokers
including passive
smokers
are
also
entitled to their rights of being healthy and not be worried
of
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inhaling
cigarette
smoke
. In conclusion, the government should ban smoking in public
spaces
. In response to that, the management of public
spaces
alongside the government should make
a
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designated chambers and outdoor
spaces
for active
smokers
.
This
is to protect non-
smokers
and passive
smokers
from inhaling
cigarette
smoke
as it could potentially be dangerous to some.
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