Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
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a big role in shaping teenagers into the person they become in the future.
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providing
children
, they could turn into violent teenagers. Children
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children
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their peers, they should know that not everyone could be given something immediately without behaving well.
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such
as substance abuse, school fights, and running away from home. Juveniles
simply did not have the same chance as privileged children
to experience nurturing love from their parents and friend groups. Through the dangerous environment filled with careless people, juveniles
learn how to commit violent acts and crime
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lack of social and emotional learning. Juveniles
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