In the past, people used to travel to see the differences from their home country. However, the sceneries in places around the world seem similar nowadays. What are the causes of these similarities? Do you think that the advantages of these similarities outweigh the disadvantages?

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Global tourism is enjoying an upsurge in popularity nowadays.

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trend is accompanied by many complaints that similarities of the landscapes considerably reduce the delights and attractions of the travel. Globalisation, in my mind, is the greatest reason for the similarities. I

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think that it has more disadvantages than benefits. No doubt, globalisation unifies the world in many different aspects. Girls in Shanghai can be witnessed to have the same street look

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those in Paris and Milan; KFC and Pizza Hut are

popular

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in Bangkok as they are back in California; the amazing film "2012" was premiered internationally at the same moment. Tourist attractions cannot escape from

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sweeping trend.

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, it is quite normal to hear comments from a tourist in Hong Kong, claiming that what he or she has seen is just the same as in Tokyo.

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phenomenon, to me, is a depressing one. People may have sacrificed too many of their cultural identities for

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. Culture is our ancestors' most

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heritage

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supposed to be passed on from generation to generation. It would be disastrous if people could only recall those busy shopping streets

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of the traditional lanes and houses after their trip to Vietnam. And I remember how frustrated I was when I found a lot of popular souvenirs in some foreign countries that could be bought back in Ho Chi Minh City — those delicate wooden sculptures really seemed far less appealing to me.

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, since the trend of globalisation is inevitable, I suggest that both the government and the public make joint efforts

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their unique cultural features.

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, global tourism would eventually turn

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be boring and pointless.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Globalization
Homogenization
Architectural uniformity
Cultural exchange
International brands
Tourism industry
Urban design
Economic development
Proliferation of media
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