Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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public
work
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for the same
work
in their whole career,
however
, other public think that it is far more interesting to try different jobs and it has more opportunities to get a promotion. public who
work
for the same organisation all their working life may have a more stable life and they have a fixed social environment.
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, they can have a deep understanding of their working content.
However
, working for the same organisation and doing the same things for their whole career might let
public
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feel boring, and
this
might influence their productivity.
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, in China,
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do
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not need to worry about they will be fired if they pass the public examination and
work
for the government. On the opposite,
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who change their working organisations
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to face more challenges since they need to learn a lot of things in a short period of time and improve
this
company’s production.
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,
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can have more chances to learn more new technology and communicate with more public from all over the world. If they perform better, they can get an influential position and make more money. From my perspective, it is better to
work
for different organisations since
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potential ability can be always found when they face challenges and it is quite interesting for them to deal with different things every day.
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  • Corporate ladder
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
  • Job security
  • Promotion prospects
  • Cross-functional experience
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