In many countries, paying for things using mobile app is becoming increasingly common. Does this development are having more advantages or disadvantages?

In recent years, statistics show that there is a growing number of customers using mobile phones to pay for their bills and living expenses. Some
people
believe
this
is a positive development as it is very convenient for a majority of
people
while
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argue that
this
is negative because
this
technology is immature and
people
stand a chance of having their personal information by identity theft. In
this
essay, I will elaborate on both opinions and give my stance at the end. Admittedly, over-reliance on digital
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may pose a threat to
people
's bank
account
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. Considering the large volume of shoppers online, it comes as no
suprise
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surprise
that identity theft has become a profitable industry. Each
years
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, there are thousands of
people
reported that their personal information is leaked to vicious businesses and they have always been the target of
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harassment
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harassment
by advertisers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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