These days many children spend a lot of time playing video games and many parents feel this is very negative. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays
children
are addicted to playing
video
games
and the parents think that
this
cause
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a negative effects
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negative effects
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on
children
's life.I completely agree with
this
and in
this
,
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I will discuss the cons of playing
games
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First
and foremost,
video
games
are a great way of entertainment.
However
, addiction to that causes health issues
such
as diabetes, obesity, stress and depression.
For instance
, Based on
studies
,
children
are less active these days,
consequently
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they suffer from high blood pressure, obesity and diabetes.
Moreover
,
children
who spend the majority of the day playing
games
feel lonely as they have less or no communication with friends and family and they would not have any friends to express their feelings or to make memorable experiences.
Thus
, the suicide rate of
children
had surged over
the
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recent years.
Secondly
,
video
games
also
affect academics negatively. When
children
pay more attention to
games
, their attention to
studies
plummets. Staying late at night will make
children
exhaust to focus on
studies
and they will not have enough time to complete their homework.
As a result
, their grades will be lower and lose interest in their
studies
over time. To exemplify, after the holidays the young schoolers will be very lazy to attend school as they were drifted away from education for a long time. In conclusion, even though playing
video
games
is a mode of entertainment it brings a lot of negativities into
children
's life.
Therefore
, it is
a
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responsibility of the parents to educate
children
on how to balance entertainment and education.
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