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Some people prefer to spend most of their time with friends. Other people prefer to be alone most of the time. Which way of life do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer.

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It is important for
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person
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a person
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 to have
social
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a social
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life
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, to make
friends
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time
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 with them. It is
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 alone with yourself, so what way of
life
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 I do prefer? Without
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friends
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 people feel lonely and not loved.
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Abstention
 of social
life
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affect
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person's
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a person's
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 mental health,
person
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 can start
became
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sociaphyth
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sociopath
 or else.
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 the reason why I think
friends
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me
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 in my
life
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,
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 is why I think all people need to spend
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 with their
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. In my opinion, it is
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 important to spend
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 with ourselves because only alone we can be self-motivated. Self-motivation helps us study new things, gain knowledge and go for our
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. Of course, if
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person
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 is spending his alone
time
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un useful
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unuseful
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,
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,
in
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on
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medias
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media
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 or
laying
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 in
the
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bed,
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 it will be better to waste
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time
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 with
friends
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.
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, the point of alone
time
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 is how you are managing it. You should work on yourself to
became
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 a better
person
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,
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 it wouldn't be just a waste of
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. I prefer to spend half of the
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 with my
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 and the other half of the
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 alone. In my point of view, people shouldn't be addicted to their
friends
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 but they
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 should
thinks
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 about their mental health.

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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure of your essay by using clearer transitions between ideas and paragraphs. Also, provide a stronger introduction and conclusion to better frame your argument.
task achievement
You have addressed the task but ensure that you clearly express your preference and elaborate on the reasons for your choice. Develop your ideas with more specific examples to make your argument more comprehensive.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preference
  • solitude
  • social skills
  • emotional support
  • self-reflection
  • personal growth
  • sense of belonging
  • mental health
  • sense of community
  • concentration
  • productivity
  • lasting memories
  • creativity
  • perspective
  • original thought
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