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Many people today choose to move rural areas to cities in search of better opportunities. Does this have more advantages or disadvantages for a country?

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The number of people migrating from rural
areas
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 to cities could look for high-salary jobs
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 the impacts of local migration are both good and bad points. My standpoint on
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 issue is more disadvantages than advantages. One of the most common advantages of settling down in urban
areas
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 from the countryside is a lot of types of
job
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 requirements. As far as the number of
job
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 opportunities, people who live in cities can easily find gainful employment compared to rural
areas
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. Take
for example
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 Tokyo, the capital of Japan, the
population
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 has increased over 50 years because there are a variety of
job
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 descriptions. The increasing trends in
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 in Tokyo since the 1970s could result in the recent economic growth of Tokyo.
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,
this
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 trend would lead to a more advanced
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 society in rural
areas
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. As far
as
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apply
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the Japanese countryside, it is common younger generation moves to metropolitan
areas
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 to start their
job
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 after graduation from high schools or universities. Once younger people could play a valuable key role in local communities
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 as leaders of manual labour and traditional festivals, but nowadays lack of manpower could cause a diminished local society.
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, the disadvantages of migration into urban cities outweigh than advantages, because small villages would die in the future caused to increasing
population
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 outflow. These kinds of unbalanced
population
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 problems are getting a recent global issue. Not only local residents but
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 the government should solve
this
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 problem together and take an action immediately.
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