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You are looking for part-time employment. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: • give details about your professional experience and qualifications • explain what type of work you are looking for • say how they can contact you and when you would be available to start work.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest to get registered with your employment agency as I am looking for a suitable part-
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 job and would appreciate your consideration. I graduated from Kasetsart University in 2020 with a
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 Class degree in Mechanical Engineering. At present, I am currently working as a production engineer at
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 factory. As you can see from my CV. I have been working as an Engineer for 2 years, and I decided to change to a part-
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 job. Since I am planning to study for a Master's Degree
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 Business, so I
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won't

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 spare
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 for reading and studying as well. I consider myself to be hard-working, reliable, excellent at
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 management and motivated, and I am
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 an expert at engineering skills, strong communication skills and inventory management skills. I believe
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 part-
time
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 job in the engineering field will suit me well.
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, I can start to work on 1st August. Please find enclosed my references and resume. I appreciate your
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Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 in reviewing
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 letter, and I am available to come for an interview at any
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 at your convenience. If you need any additional information, please do not hesitate to contact me by phone. Yours sincerely, Jamie P.

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