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Only goverment action can solve housing shortage in big cities?

#goverment #action #shortage #cities
These days it seems that more governments can dissolve the housing shortage in the metropolitan. As you know the population worldwide is raised; so we need to increase the amount of building especially houses or flats. In point of my view, it is a very useful action because
people
 add more in the big cities.
First
 of all , we should pay attention to
build
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building
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 adequate accommodation in a large city because
every day
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everyday
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 residents there are raised. Unfortunately, there is little land for building in these
place
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places
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;
however
, in small cities or towns, there are
lots
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lot
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 of ground.
For example
 in London, the cost of a residential building is very high .I think about three months ago ,I decided to purchase a flat, but I can not afford it. There
are
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is
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 some
survey
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surveys
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 about the increasing appeal of housing in megacities. Around ten
percent
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per cent
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 of
people
 do not have a safe apartment for living in.If every state thinks about
this
 issue and solves it, the
people
 will live in a comfortable place. Basically, when exists more houses, the cost of it decreases automatically. To conclude, constructing more accommodation in a big city helps to many problems;
moreover
, it is very useful for poverty
people
.
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