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In the past employees worked for small businesses, but now many are working for large businesses. Do you think working for large businesses has more advantages than disadvantages?

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The charts illustrate a designed floor
plan
 and suggested
changes
 to be made to the
plan
. Overall, there were notable
changes
 made to the proposed
plan
.
To begin
 with, in the
kitchen
, more items were added.
For instance
, in the floor
plan
, there was no
kitchen
 furniture and there was only one internal
door
 located far away from the
entrance
. In the proposed
plan
, there is
kitchen
 furniture and two internal doors just close to the
entrance
 and the
door
 far from the
entrance
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 been removed. On the right side of the
plan
, there are notable
changes
 too. In the suggested
plan
, the internal
door
 leading to the living room, the storage under stairs and the internal wall and the hall, have all been removed. Stairs were moved to the internal wall close to the
kitchen
 and more were added.
However
, no
changes
 were made to the
entrance
door
 as it remained the same.
Also
, the size of the
plan
 did not change.
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