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In the past employees worked for small businesses, but now many are working for large businesses. Do you think working for large businesses has more advantages than disadvantages?

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The charts illustrate a designed floor
plan
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 and suggested
changes
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 to be made to the
plan
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. Overall, there were notable
changes
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 made to the proposed
plan
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.
To begin
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 with, in the
kitchen
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, more items were added.
For instance
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, in the floor
plan
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, there was no
kitchen
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 furniture and there was only one internal
door
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 located far away from the
entrance
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. In the proposed
plan
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, there is
kitchen
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 furniture and two internal doors just close to the
entrance
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 and the
door
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 far from the
entrance
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have
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 been removed. On the right side of the
plan
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, there are notable
changes
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 too. In the suggested
plan
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, the internal
door
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 leading to the living room, the storage under stairs and the internal wall and the hall, have all been removed. Stairs were moved to the internal wall close to the
kitchen
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 and more were added.
However
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, no
changes
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 were made to the
entrance
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door
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 as it remained the same.
Also
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, the size of the
plan
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 did not change.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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