n a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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disadvantages and traffic jam transportation is one of them.Today, we are here to discuss the two
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new transportation with
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destination faster with a huge gain amount of time so they can have
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to do their purposes without any waiting or obstacle along the ways.
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it is very
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for most people because their can
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someone do the
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with a large pricing gas fuel because of the rarity it is
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the government to spend the money fixing the
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is public transport.Traffic jam is an
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incident causing many
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attention so they want the problem to solve nicely without bad problems and they don't trust the train because it can happen many bad
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right after its invention.
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going to be a spectacular step to take to a more knowledgeable future with new transport.
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