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In many large cities, people waste hours of their time every day because of traffic congestion on the roads. What are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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People living around the world in urban areas, waste their precious time due to
traffic
jams
.
This
 is a serious issue because it affects people’s mental health. Whereas, there could be many reasons for
traffic
jams
.
This
 essay will focus on some serious causes of
traffic
 congestion and as well as offer suggestions to improve it. Foremost, organizations, schools, and universities follow the constant timing
to begin
 the day to perform activities & work, which results in heavy
traffic
 on roads.
Moreover
, shortage of public transport facilities and unstandardized infrastructure. Because of
this
, people choose a convenient and alternate way to use their own cars and motorbikes.
Therefore
, it may concern of huge
traffic
 congestion, in order to reduce
traffic
 on the roads
government
 should come up with standard infrastructure and provide a sufficient public transport system.
Also
, population growth can be the cause of many problems.
Traffic
jams
 are one of those.
For instance
, these days every single house consists of at least one car and two-to-three bikes in many states of India. Sometimes competition among the companies would be beneficial for individuals. Cheap motorbikes and cars are
also
 available in instalments. Many peoples are availing
this
 facility.
This
 can cause
traffic
jams
 in the cities.
However
, the
government
 cannot stop those businesses. But can implement some strict laws to control the
traffic
such
 as imposing heavy fines in violation of the
traffic
 rules, police patrolling, organising signal timings and installing CCTV cameras everywhere in the cities. I must close, by saying that, both individuals and
government
 are responsible to control the
traffic
 issues in the cities. People must be patient while driving. Rash driving can cause accidents as well as
traffic
jams
.
Government
 should upgrade the
traffic
 rules and infrastructures every year in research of increasing in the number of registered vehicles and population.
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