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3. Some people think that having a set retiremnt age (e.g 65 years) for everyone, regardless off occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retiremnent? –

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Some people think that having a set retirement
age
 is unfair and certain
workers
 deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier
age
.
Although
, the set retirement
age
 is made from a perspective of maximum
age
 people could still work in a good performance, but
this
 will deny that some types of work are more demanding than others.
Therefore
, I agree that certain
workers
 deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier
age
.
Firstly
, for me, it would be a great help for the types of
workers
 who worked in a demanding environment risking their health, both physically and mentally.
For example
 in a healthcare institution,
such
 as doctors and nurses. Many of them care for people’s well-being but disregard their health and become sick in the process, making themselves the patients in their hospital.
Additionally
, it is commonly known that health-related profession school is so expensive, tiring and have a long period of study before they can work to support themselves.
Moreover
, when they are interning in the hospital they
also
 had to always be on-clock to be present when needed, even at midnight. Despite that, people consider them as one of the highest-paid salary careers, it does vary from one hospital to another hospital, especially if they are just graduated from their bachelor's education and not yet through specialized education. In conclusion, certain types of
workers
 deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier
age
, since it makes them risk their own health and life.
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