There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university?

While university
education
is no longer considered
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a luxury nowadays, in the past, only
privilieged
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privileged
individuals were able to do so. To that extent, many
people
believe that it has
positive
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impact
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the community, others,
however
, believe that the quality of
education
is deteriorating because of it. In
this
essay, I will explain the positive impact of the increasing amount of
students
going to universities as well as the drawbacks.
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number
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of
universities
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students
has lots of benefits.
Firstly
, the increasing number of educated
people
creates
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society. Many studies have shown that the crime rate is negatively correlated to the
education
level of
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society.
Secondly
, more educated
people
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the nation's economy. Educated
people
are more productive and they bring more value to their country's economy. Despite the benefits, it
also
comes with a few drawbacks.
To begin
with, the teaching process inside the classroom is not going to be effective.
People
understand things in different ways, but since the teachers have to teach many
students
, the method of teaching is becoming more general and not personalized.
Furthermore
, more student creates more competition and it might pressure the
students
. The stress of competition might cause the
students
to cheat in order to get
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Therefore
, the purpose of
education
will not be fulfilled because
students
focus more on grades than on learning. In conclusion, more
people
are going to universities today
then
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it was before. Even though some
people
believe that
this
is a good thing, others believe that it
also
has some drawbacks.
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