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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #drink #products #levels #sugar #health #people
Nowadays because
of
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most
products
 in supermarkets contain a high level of
sugar
 which can lead to several diseases, the cost of
sugar
 should be raised. I agree with
this
 statement because
sugar
 can cause addictiveness which can be a reason for impulsive
behavior
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 and obesity.
Also
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people
 can still consume it by eating fruits which contain natural
glucose
. It is claimed that
sugar
 can have the same addictive effect as nicotine. As
people
 who utilize cigarettes often behave in
impulsive
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 way to buy more
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nicotine-containing
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nicotine containing
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nicotine-containing
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product
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products
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, the comparable effect has
a
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sugar
. Cakes, chocolate, pies, and other tasty
products
often
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 popular among
people
 because of
its
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their
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 sweetness and they tend to eat more because of
its
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their
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 sweet taste.
As a result
,
people
 may have a few problems with excess weight.
Thus
, it is vital to cut the production of
enormous
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the enormous
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amount
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amounts
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 of
sugar
 by
rising
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raising
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 its price. There are healthy alternatives to
sugar
such
 as fruits and vegetables. Many
people
 don’t see that they can naturally get a daily amount of
glucose
 by eating healthy
products
. A lot of fruits that are affordable to most
people
 contain a big amount of
glucose
 which is the main source of energy.
In addition
, they contain not only
glucose
,
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 but
also
 vitamins, macro-,
microelements
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and microelements
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 which are
also
essential
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an essential
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part
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parts
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 of maintaining our health.
For example
,
orange
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oranges
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,
spinach
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and spinach
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contain
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contains
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 vitamin C, and if
people
 don’t take
daily
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a daily
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 dose of
this
 vitamin, it will lead to
disease
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 called
cinga
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Icinga
.
Therefore
, consuming them can be a good alternative to chocolates and other sugary
products
 which harms our well-being. In conclusion, soda and other drinks contain
sugar
 in big doses which can cause
people
 unconsciously consume it more,
therefore
 it is unhealthy for them.
People
 will spend less money buying them
,
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 if their price is higher, and
instead
 of
them
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 the popularity of natural
products
 will increase.
That is
 why I believe
this
 decision may contribute
for
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 changing the routine of society and
bring
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 new habits into their lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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