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You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flat mates. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter, state your reason for writing describe the problems and explain how you feel propose a solution and risk the landlord to take action

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Dear
Mr.
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 Soni My name is Rahul and
i
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 live in your apartment no - 27,William Street. I am writing
this
 letter to dissatisfaction
in
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 your hot water and heating
system
 that
fixed
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on
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apply
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last
 month. As
i
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 remember that we were coming to 5
month
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months
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 ago when it's completely working
this
system
 but after some time
this
system
 is not working so you sent plumber. He fixed
this
system
 and it's working properly but after
some
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it's not work
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it's not working
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 properly . Now you know winter is coming in
next
 month and
i
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 have no time boiling water because my office Time is very early . I would like you
tell
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about
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me about
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 my friend. He is know how
heating
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the heating
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system
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systems
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are
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is
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repairer
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repaired
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 and he
also
 fixed
this
system
 as soon as possible. I would
waiting
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wait
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 for your response
this
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to this
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 problem.
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Yours
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Your
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 sincerely, Rahul
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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