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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another countryz. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter - explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months - say how your work could be done while you are away - ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear
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 Jayarathne, I am writing
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 letter requesting to get an opportunity to work based on the company head office in
singapore
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 for six months period. The idea was established in my mind after your speech on January 1st
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where
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 you explained your experience at
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head office
headoffice
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. I hope, the opportunity will provide more knowledge on
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 operation of the group while getting the exposure
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 working with foreign colleagues.
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 to that, I have heard that the working environment is exceptional there. If I am to
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 to
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head office
headoffice
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, my current work can be delegated temporarily to my junior
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 other general operations, I can
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carry out
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 remotely from Singapore while working extra hours. It will be a great help
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 if you can
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 with the
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 HR manager relating to the availability of
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 because you are working directly with them.
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, I believe they respect you the most and will arrange things immediately. I am expecting
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a
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positive feedback from you
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it
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will enhance my career growth enabling
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 serve better. Yours sincerely,
Thulya
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Thuya
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