The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and city closing do you agree or disagree?

In the modern era, the growth of technology has impacted the way
people
shop,
for
instance
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people
use their smartphones to buy in
the
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apply
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online
shops
and it will come just in a couple of days. Most
the
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people
said that it is easier
instead
to go to traditional
markets
. In
this
,
essay
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I will discuss that one-day online shopping will ease
shops
in town and city.
Firstly
, there is nothing that can't stop the growth of technology, for ,instance the internet.
This
time it really is the disrupted of a conventional
life's
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life
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,
such
as the
shops
. Online
markets
have become more and more,
also
users. These
markets
give many
products
with
picture
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pictures
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and detail of
condition
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conditions
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,
,
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moreover
, the price is so competitive.
Then
,
people
can easily compare all the
products
in some online
shops
just using their smartphones.
Furthermore
, it will
delivered
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be delivered
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to your home just for a mount of
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the day
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day
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days
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,
ondepend
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depend
on depend
the distance from the shop to your house.
On the other hand
, the number of
shops
in town
have
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become started to decrease gradually. For some things like vegetables or animal
shops
, they can still to operated for the
last
. ,
Furthermore
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like vegetables have expired
date
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dates
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shorter than other
products
,
such
as electronics or clothes.
Additionally
,
traditional
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the traditional
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market will stand to
last
,
this
cause
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causes
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old
people
to
more
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be more
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like to come directly to
market
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instead
to go online.
As a result
, online shopping will lead the system of shopping,
moreover
, it will grow more and more. It will reduce the number of
shops
in town and city, but traditional
markets
will stay to
last
due to old consumers who more like
tocome
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to come
see the
products
directly, for ,example old
people
. In another word, online shopping will still grow but cant ease all the conventional
markets
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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