some employers think that formal academic qualifications are more important than life experience and personal qualities when they look for an employee.why is it the case?is it a positive or negative development?

In the contemporary world,there is a lot of competition among youngsters in the race of getting job opportunities.several employers accept qualified
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rather than
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.I firmly believe that it is more of
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essay intends to discuss how experienced employees are
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option
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than qualified
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First
and foremost,the major reason is
work
experience
knowledge
.To be more specific,every organisation or
company
prefers a highly skilled
employee
as compared to a degree holder.
For instance
,
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need to give initial training for
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recruited
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employee
.
In addition
to
this
,the other main reason is
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quality.To be more specific,every
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business
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business
company
has a protocol which needs to be strictly followed by all employees for
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working of an organisation.To exemplify,
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the candidate is fully qualified
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lack of personal qualities and social ethical values will impact the
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reputation
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reputation
of an organisation.The discipline of staff is equally important as
work
.
on the contrary
,the
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employee
studied and learnt various ongoing and future technical
knowledge
.
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,in
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era of science and technology,each and every faculty of employment must require
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employee
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knowledge
of handling techno gadgets. To conclude,in the above discussion it is quite evident that
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employee
is more mature and capable of performing much better
work
than of performing much better
work
and capable of performing much better
work
than a
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employee
.
Although
a candidate with academic
knowledge
has
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theoretical
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theoretical
knowledge
of the
work
but
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in practical
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experienced
one
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is much
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for the
company
's profit.
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