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some employers think that formal academic qualifications are more important than life experience and personal qualities when they look for an employee.why is it the case?is it a positive or negative development?

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In the contemporary world,there is a lot of competition among youngsters in the race of getting job opportunities.several employers accept qualified
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 rather than
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.I firmly believe that it is more of
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option
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 than qualified
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 and foremost,the major reason is
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 experience
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.To be more specific,every organisation or
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 prefers a highly skilled
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 as compared to a degree holder.
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 need to give initial training for
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unexperienced
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employee
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.
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 to
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,the other main reason is
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 quality.To be more specific,every
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business
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business
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 has a protocol which needs to be strictly followed by all employees for
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 working of an organisation.To exemplify,
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 the candidate is fully qualified
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lack of personal qualities and social ethical values will impact the
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reputation
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reputation
 of an organisation.The discipline of staff is equally important as
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.
on the contrary
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,the
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employee
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 studied and learnt various ongoing and future technical
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.
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,in
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 era of science and technology,each and every faculty of employment must require
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employee
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 that
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posses
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knowledge
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 of handling techno gadgets. To conclude,in the above discussion it is quite evident that
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an experienced
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employee
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 is more mature and capable of performing much better
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 than of performing much better
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 and capable of performing much better
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 than a
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employee
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.
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 a candidate with academic
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 has
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theoretical
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theoretical
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 of the
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but
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in practical
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 experienced
one
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is much
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more beneficial
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 for the
company
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's profit.
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