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Students from disadvantaged families and rural areas are finding it difficult to get a university education. Some people believe that universities should help them. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons...

#students #families #areas #university #education #people #universities
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 person in four different countries produced between 1967 and 2007. Overall, while per-capita
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 in the UK and Sweden went down over the course of
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 in the UK remained higher than in the other three countries over these 40 years. Sweden’s
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 rose from roughly 9 metric
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 in 1967 to its maximum of about 10.5 metric
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 in 2007, making Sweden one of the smallest per-capita emitters of
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 dioxide of the four countries that year. Average
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 emissions that each person in Italy was responsible for climbed gradually from approximately 4.5 to almost 8 metric
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 between 1967 and 2007. In Portugal, each person only produced around 1.5 metric
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