You work in a busy but poorly organised office and you are keen to be promoted. Your employer needs to find a new supervisor for your department. Write a letter to your employer. In the letter: ask to be considered for this job explain why you would be a suitable candidate outline the current problems and the changes you would like to make
Dear Mr Smith
I am Nguyen, I am from the financial department.
As you know our department now have some problems that why we can not serve the services properly to you. Their issues
are almost come
from our supervisor, he is really poor capabilities management. So I think you should choose the new one as soon as possible in case our work will become Change to the active voice
almost come
have almost come
more
worse. For about myself I would like to introduce to you that Change the word
apply
i
have more experience in Change the capitalization
I
this
industry and i
Change the capitalization
I
has
just got a certificate Correct subject-verb agreement
have
about
how big data for financial management so I think Change preposition
in
i
can help our organization go over those obstacles. So I really appreciate Change the capitalization
I
if
you give me a chance to interview about my knowledge and skills. And if Correct pronoun usage
it if
i
can become a manager I think Change the capitalization
I
i
can give our organization some solutions to resolve those issues, Change the capitalization
I
for
example
Add the comma(s)
,example
the
Correct article usage
apply
first
I will transform our financial system to concentrate on informations
to make decisions Change the wording
information
pieces of information
instead
of administrative
. Replace the word
administration
The
Correct article usage
Second
second
i
will mobilize our tools and Change the capitalization
I
the
change the way we work by thinking Correct article usage
apply
Correct your spelling
outside
out side
of our department and Correct your spelling
outside
focus
on our company’s visions and purposes. Or if you can choose a good supervisor Wrong verb form
focusing
is
better Correct pronoun usage
who is
then
me Correct your spelling
than
i
will work with Change the capitalization
I
he
or Correct pronoun usage
him
she
to learn more, that’s no problem.
ThankfullyChange the pronoun
her
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The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,
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