Some people say that teenagers should work part-time and earn money. This way they will learn basic lessons about work and become more disciplined. Others argue that teenagers shouldn't sacrifice their rest and after-school activities to work. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Write 250 words.

It is often argued that

teenagers

should

work

part-

time

to acknowledge the

the

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real

work

experience

and neatness.

However

, many people

believes

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teenagers

shouldn't oblation their

time

to rest by doing

an after-school activities

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after-school activities

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for

work

. Both

opinion

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are understandable, honestly, I have to mind about

this

, it is a good

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think

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to give an early

introducing

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the

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real

work

experience

by taking a part-

time

job

to the

teenagers

,

however

, at the same

time

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it can be a

disasters

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for their

health

. In my take on

this

,

firstly

, Part-

time

can help

the

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teenagers

to gain more money and

work

experiences that will be valuable later on.

For instance

, many

teenagers

in Yogyakarta decided to take

part-

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the part-time

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time

job

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because companies nowadays are looking for an employee who

have

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a

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worked

experience

, even

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tough

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, they are fresh graduates. Having

the

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real working

experience

is precious for their career journey.

On the other hand

, the part-

time

job

take

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juvenile

time

for rest.

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, many college

student

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students

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in Yogyakarta

having

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health

issue

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since

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they don't have

a

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proper

time

for rest because they need to

work

after

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class until in the middle of the night. Usually,

teenagers

who

taking

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part-time

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part

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part-time

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time

job

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jobs

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forget their

health

and it can be

catastrophe

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when they become older. To conclude, having a real

work

experience

for

teenagers

might be valuable for their career journey. Even so, they need to be careful about their

health

issue and know

the

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limitation

for

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theirselves

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themselves

, since

health

conditions

is

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also

important for their future.