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Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society?

Fields of
science
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 unlocked many mysteries of the world. The keys to
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 discoveries are made by ones that had allocated their time studying sciences. Unfortunately, recent data suggests that not enough
people
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 are studying
science
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subject
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 in university. 
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 issue comes from the limited access to
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 in sciences, followed by stating the impacts involving underemployment and the lack of improvement in the
science
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 field.  When
people
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 are looking for their future profession, it is often focused on how to get
their
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, and what the task would be involved
.
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science
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 profession, there is a strong stigma that all learners become scientists. Despite
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 being
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 false representation of all post-graduates,
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 idea can put
people
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 back from taking the subject.
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, university courses often
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 higher application requirement when it comes to
science
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 subject.
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, medicine courses in
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 full A grades to even make an application. With regards to the question of what consequences
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 situation would cause, I imagine that it would involve
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 allocation of human resources. Since the demand
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 workers with
science
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 would rise, it may cause
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 drain in countries
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which
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where
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 general
wadges
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wages
 are low, creating
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 knowledge gap between wealthy and poor countries.
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, with overall
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 of
people
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 with knowledge of
science
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, scientific improvement would drop drastically.
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 can result in difficulties overcoming problems that
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 professional knowledge,
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extreme weather issues. In conclusion, the minute number of students involved in
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science
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 field comes as a consequence of
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narrow access to
science
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 professions. Impacting
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society by
detoriating
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deteriorating
 wealth gaps, and pulling back away from
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breakthrough
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breakthroughs
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.

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