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Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: Say why you would like to go on the trip Suggest what you could do to help during the trip Ask other about the trip

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Dear
Mrs.
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 Shah, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform
that
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you that
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 will come
your
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on your
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 school
trip
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. My name is
suhani
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Shani
 , my son
rahul
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Rahul
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 is
student
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a student
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of
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on
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 your school campus.
Last
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 night, my son tell me about our
trip
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 and
also
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 tell about
parent
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parents
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 come with together. So
i
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I
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 decided to come with my son
in
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on
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 our
trip
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.
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,
i
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I
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 will help cook the food for all students and teachers . I have many ideas for new healthy food . So
i
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I
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 can manage
cook
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to cook
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 meals .
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,
i
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I
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 am a nurse ,
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in case
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incase
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in case
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of
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apply
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any child is
engage
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 so
i
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 could treatment.
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, please
given
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give
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 me extra detail about our
trip
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 so
i
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I
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 will help you .my contact number is 8756454223. I hope we will meet soon Yours sincerely, Suhani
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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