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In some parts of the world, the rate of divorce has increased dramatically over the past few decades. Explain some possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions.

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Over the past decade,there
have
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 been an increase in the
number
 of
divorce
 cases in some parts of the world.In
these
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essay
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 we will be looking at some of the causes of
this
 and possible solutions to
these problem
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.
Divorce
,which is the termination of a
marriage
aggrement
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agreement
 between a married couple, has been common
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is
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 our society and some of the causes attributing to
this
 is,
lack
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 of interest in a spouse resulting from stress.These factor kills the love in a
marriage
,thereby making the couple not
to
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put
effort
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in
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 caring for
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the
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the
 family,
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a
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research
reserch
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 carried out in
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 state among 100 divorced persons had 73
percent
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per cent
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 of the individuals saying they lost interest in the union due to fatigue from work and day -to day activities,which brings about a burnout in the relationship.
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Another
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 cause of
divorce
 is
lack
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otruwt
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trust
 in
the
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marriage
, these factor has proven to have caused a significant
number
 of
divorce
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the
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society as a
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research
reserch
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 project carried out by students of sociology
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university
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 of Africa, revealed in
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their
 findings that
30percent
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30 percent
 of
africa's
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 incidence was caused by one partner losing trust
imonthe
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month
months
 other , thereby causing
withdrawal
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 of love and affection.Other factors
includes
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:
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 lying,
family
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a family
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 background which
have
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shown
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 to have
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 to it. Solutions to
divorce
, depends on the
couples
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couple's
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 readiness to stay together,
however
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one way to handle
divorce
 is through
marriage
counseling
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,
that is
 the couple or
soon to be married
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 individual should be
counceled
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counselled
cancelled
 by a professional psychologist on the secrete of maintaining a happy home and marital problem management technics.A journal released by the
american
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 psychologist association
,
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 has stated that
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partners
patners
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partners
 who
attending
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councelling
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counselling
 in the year 2015 in California have recorded an insignificant
number
 of
divorce
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divorces
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,
these
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 which is a positive step to solving
this
 marital pandemic. To sum up, there
have
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 been a recent increase in the
number
 of
divorce
 cases, which is being caused by a
number
 of factors ranging from, stress,lack of trust and lies.Despite these
causes
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 if individuals
cn
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can
in
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attend
a trend
atrend
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attend
 counselling
class
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 by a psychologist,
i
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 believe the
number
 of
divorce
 cases will
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experience
esperience
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experience
 a decline.
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