some people think that women should not be allowed to work in the police force. do you agree or disagree

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in some
place
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that requires
teenagers
to do voluntary
work
in the middle of their free
time
. I strongly agree with that norm because doing some volunteer
work
can give a
lot
of benefits to not only
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but
also
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teenager
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teenagers
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itself
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.
First
, unpaid
work
can
benefit
teenagers
in
term
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of experience.
Doing
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some voluntary activities,
teenagers
will gain a
lot
of advantages,
such
as knowledge and experience, that can be
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useful
usefull
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useful
for their life in the future. By working
in
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the
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early
time
,
teenagers
will force themselves to get used to a
lot
of
kind
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of occupations that they will face in their
real life
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when growing
adult
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adults
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. Unpaid
work
, largely, helps
teenagers
to improve their
skill
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skills
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and character.
Teenagers
who are
get
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used to
do
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a
lot
of
works
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, paid or unpaid in the past
time
, will be more
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persistent
persistant
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persistent
and stronger in the future. For
community
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, voluntary
works
also
give a
lot
of
benefit
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benefits
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. There are many kinds of
works
in the resident that can be done by
volunteer
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volunteers
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such
as cleaning the public facilities, maintaining
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a place
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place
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of worship, and other social voluntary
works
. In school, especially high school,
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the student
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student
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students
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can participate in a
lot
of activities that can give
benefit
to
school
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community
. For
community
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the community
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, despite material
benefit
, unpaid
works
by
teenagers
also
bring immaterial
benefit
such
as improvement in
community
unity and relationship among member.
Although
voluntary
work
by
teenagers
brings a
lot
of positive impacts to society,
but
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there must be
regulation
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that
control
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that scheme.
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should impose
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a clear
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limitation
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in
term
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of
kind
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of
works
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work
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and
time
spent by
teenagers
who are doing voluntary
works
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work
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. The regulation is needed to avoid
exploitation
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the exploitation
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of
teenagers
. In brief,
obligation
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an obligation
the obligation
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that requires
teenagers
to have voluntary
works
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work
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will bring a
lot
of
benefit
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benefits
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not only
for
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to
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community
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the community
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but
also
teenager
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itself
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as long as there is clear
reagulation
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regulation
regulations
that
control
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unpaid
work
implementation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inherent equality
  • law enforcement
  • empathy
  • gender-based violence
  • community relations
  • diversity
  • team performance
  • systemic gender bias
  • physical requirements
  • culture of masculinity
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