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It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, furnishing the young generation with higher
education
 plays an indispensable role in most national policies.
However
, some
people
 believe that pursuing tertiary
education
 for the majority of youngsters is not only impossible but
also
 disadvantageous. From my perspective, I completely agree with
this
 statement for the following reasons.
To begin
 with, not all young
people
 have the opportunity to attend universities or colleges, especially those who live in developing countries. In fact, financial difficulties prevent many
people
 from pursuing their higher
education
.
This
 is particularly the case for those learners who are unable to afford prohibitive tuition fees.
Additionally
, the government needs to build educational facilities and infrastructure for learning.
Nevertheless
, many countries do not even meet basic requirements
such
 as food and healthcare.
Furthermore
, there are numerous drawbacks when a wide range of young
people
 enter university.
This
 preferential policy causes a shortage of manual workers while the young generation with adequate knowledge and skills will not apply for these positions. To illustrate, drivers or construction workers will be understaffed while the unemployment rate is increasing as machines gradually replace humans.
As a result
, it leads to a huge imbalance in the labour market. In conclusion, it’s my firm belief that it is both unfeasible and unhelpful for a country to provide entry to tertiary
education
 for a large percentage of young
people
.
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