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A balanced diet, or eating balanced meals, is the key to a healthy life. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#diet #meals #life
Good health is the significance of
individual
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individuals
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 on how they prepare their
food
. Balance diet and exact
food
 ay lead to
optimum
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an optimum
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 health condition, I can say
thay
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that
 eating in moderation is a practice that may cause a human being healthy. Nowadays, people are
buzy
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busy
 in doing things of
day to day
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 daily routines, many of them are not
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conscious
concious
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conscious
 of the
food
thay
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that
 they eat even
it
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if it
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 is not suitable
on
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for
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 their health
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as a result
 they get sick because of those circumstances.
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For example
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 if you are hypertensive
then
 you eat
an oily foods
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 which
is
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are
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 not good
food
 for you
this
 may cause of increase
blood
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 pressure.
Furtheremore
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Furthermore
, many groups are just eating in the fast
food
 industry just because they are just living in a crowded apartment, so they
dont
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don't
 have space to cook their own
food
,
these scenario
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 may lead
of
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apply
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an individual to maintain their healthy diet and
this
 may
also
 a big problem in the future. I
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therefore
 conclude that eating in moderation and proper ingredients of
food
 that we eat is the key
of
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to
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 a healthy life and healthy living as well.
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