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A university education is becoming more expensive every year and the money paid for a degree can keep university graduates in debt for years. Therefore, tuition fees should be abolished, and governments should pay for university education. To what extent do you agree with this viewpoint?

#university #education #year #money #graduates #debt #years #tuition #fees #governments
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A high standard of
education
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 is almost a requirement for a developed
society
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. The university
students
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 could get in debt for a long time due to tuition
fees
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 that are getting more and more expensive over the years. Some people think that tuition
fees
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 should be abolished and personally, I agree with the main reason that
education
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 should be available to everyone, and it should not be a selection between economical classes. Despite the fact that all
universities
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 provide societal developments for their
students
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 in a variety of ways,
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the social environment, it might become stressful for them to pay
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 own
education
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. While
universities
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 need to be worried
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about
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 delivering
students
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 the best quality academic environment and providing
well trained
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 professionals and resources in which
students
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 could improve their academic range,
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 entire process should not be a
financially
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 weight for them. If the
fees
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 for
students
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 were abolished,
universities
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 would need other kinds of assistance from governments and
society
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 that should join hands
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of
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the greater good. An effective solution for
this
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 issue is if governments prioritize
high quality
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education
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 and if they could build a system and invest a considerable percentage in the
education
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 system, and
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long
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 term, collect the positive effects of
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 investments in
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.
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 term, they should observe the impact due to a well-educated
society
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 and the benefits that
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 investments would have on those surroundings.
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 of expensive tuition
fees
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, university
education
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 not affordable to everybody that wants to make a difference while continuing their studies,
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, governments could develop a study fund and assist
universities
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 in their maintenance and
education
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 in a feedback wheel.
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