In poor families, teenagers may have to work part-time as well as study. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this for these teenagers. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, we can see lots of youngsters working
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likely to happen to teenagers
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poor families.
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views followed by my opinion in the forthcoming paragraphs with relevant illustrations. The most significant advantage of doing
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jobs
is that it
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teenagers to get experience
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many things.
Firstly
, having to work as well as
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study is a challenging task.
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, it isn't impossible to perform two things. He will learn to take
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and
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how to save hours perfectly.
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young people,
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will
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to learn how to deal with people. For illustration, international students prefer to work on
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days to learn about
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behavior
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and how to attend
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costumers
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. The major drawback of doing
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jobs
is that it can disturb him from his studying because attending
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class and doing the assignments on time, will be difficult
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do
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the hours you are working in.
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college, most
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students
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not perform
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because of the pressure of weekend
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the youths health
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. The reason for
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of enough sleep and he will be under pressure all day. To conclude,
although
teenagers
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works cause disturbance in studying and
also
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the health of
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believe that they should do weekly
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to get different experience as well as it
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them to know about how to deal with people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • part-time work
  • finances
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • academic performance
  • minimum wage
  • job market
  • social dynamics
  • work experience
  • career development
  • economic necessity
  • self-sufficiency
  • exploitation
  • stress management
  • peer pressure
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