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Some people say that individuals should change jobs during their working life often while others believe that doing the same job has advantages to individuals, companies, and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is debatable top that individuals should keep same for life
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change
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 the jobs often. Some
people
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 keeping
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job
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give
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 overall stability, while other
people
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says
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 changing the
job
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 will give more growth.
This
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 of view in
following
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the following
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 paragraphs. On the one hand, Many
people
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 encourage to
change
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the
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their
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job
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 often for benefits like financial growth,
experience
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 and opportunities. Most
people
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change
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changing
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 the
job
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 they will always get
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 more hike in salary
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then
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 regular increment in
same
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the same
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company
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.
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, they will
gain
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 different
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experience
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experiences
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of
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 different
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company
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companies
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 and
work
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style
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styles
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. And not just
experience
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also
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 they get higher positions in
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company
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. For
instant
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, if
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an employ
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employ
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employee
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 is
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at
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a
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junior
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the junior
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position
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 with
low
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a low
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 salary and If he changes
the
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apply
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job
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 after
few
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a few
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 years, he will definitely get more salary and
higher
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a higher
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position
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different
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a different
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company
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, because each
company
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 have certain rules and regulation for increment and
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, even though, when they hire new talent
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position
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 to individual base on skills
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last
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job
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 title.
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, Some
people
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same
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job
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life
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time
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 will give more stability to employ and employee.
By doing
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 the same
job
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same
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company
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, will
gives
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 good
work
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experience
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 and give
better
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a better
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 understanding of
company
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 culture,
this
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 will make
work
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 very easy and efficient.
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, they will
gain
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 the trust of their boss. It can be
benefits
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beneficial
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 in
difficulty
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difficult
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time
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times
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 like when
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a recession
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come
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, bosses will keep the trusted and loyal workers.
Company
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be
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be also benefited
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also
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 benefits
with
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this
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 kind of
employs
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employee
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,
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they
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then
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they
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 do not have to west
there
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their
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time
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 on training new
employ
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employees
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 and keep
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work
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the work
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 process smoother. In my opinion, individuals should
change
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the
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their
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 jobs to
gain
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 more
experience
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 and
also
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 get financially strong. Though
,
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 one shout not
change
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 it very often, they should stick with
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company
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the company
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 for at least few years to
gain
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 enough
experience
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 and as
a
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work
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 ethics,
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company
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 should be pay off for their investment on him. To conclude, changing
job
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give
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gives
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 better opportunity for
employ
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employment
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, when doing
same
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the same
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job
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gain
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then
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 trust of
boss
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the boss
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 and give stability to both
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company
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companies
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 and employ itself.

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