In some countries, most people perfter to rent thier homes rather than buying them. what are advantage and disadvantage of renting home?

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of the world,
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renting houses rather than owning one. The essay discusses both benefits and drawbacks of
this
phenomenon. On the one hand, its advantages include,
initially
, the money they spend on owning a house can be useful for their children's education.
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educational institutes are charging a lot
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they used to
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Further
, these days children are willing to take
further
education abroad so, to cope with all those expenses, it's beneficial to rent a house rather
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buy it.
Lastly
,people are showing interest to spare money on something useful. Elaborating, many think that spending on construction may be a waste of money,
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they can use it on something that multiplies their earnings.
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, investing
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something that profits us, is the positive of
this
situation.
On the other hand
, its drawbacks are,
firstly
, as rented homes are not permanent, they have to frequently change their place. To exemplify, renting places are owned by some other, so are they are the dictators, we should just obey their order.
Moreover
, we do not even have the freedom to do whatever we wish to. To an epitome, my neighbouring is a rented portion, they have to take permission for everything even to utilize water.
Lastly
, lack of privacy and frequent mobility are major negative of
this
trend. To conclude, the pros of the trend are they can save those expenditures and invest in some business. Its cons are one cannot live as their wishes and should work under owner surveillance.
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