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Some people believe that companies should manufacture products that last for a long time. Others feel that the emphasis should be placed on producing goods that are cheap. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed by some individuals that manufacturers should produce good
quality
goods
 that are durable, whereas some
people
 prefer that organizations should focus on manufacturing
goods
 that are inexpensive and affordable. In my opinion,
companies
 should produce high-end
products
 at low cost so they can be used by all
the
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classes of our
society
. On one hand, some
people
 suggest that
companies
 should focus on producing high-
quality
products
 so that customers could use
it
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them
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 for a longer time which will benefit the pockets of consumers as they don't need to spend money again and again to buy the same commodity.
Additionally
, superior
quality
products
 are low maintenance so
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they
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it
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isit
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 pocket friendly.
However
, the big brands who are manufacturing good
quality
products
 have created their monopoly in the market and they charge huge amounts for their reliable
products
.
For example
, apple phones are super durable with water resistance with good pixel and camera
quality
 but very expensive that it is not affordable for middle-class
people
.
On the contrary
, some folks consider that the focus should be on manufacturing
goods
 at affordable
prices
 so that all classes of
society
 should be able to purchase and make use of the
products
. The big percentage of the population in the country is either middle class or poor class
people
 and buying costly
products
 is not at all feasible for them.
Therefore
, if brands could reduce the cost of
products
 it would become a boon for
the
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society
.
For example
,China
companies
 like Xiaomi, and Realme manufacture the same smartphones at an extremely cheaper amount compared to the
iphone
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iPhone
 so that almost all folks can buy and use them. In my opinion, if
companies
 will produce good
quality
goods
 at a stingy rate it would increase the business as because of its affordable price all the classes of our
society
 would purchase it resulting in an increase of demand of the product which will eventually increase the sale and company's profit and revenue will reach heights. I believe
companies
 spend a huge amount on marketing and advertisements by reducing that it is feasible lower the
prices
 of commodities.
For example
, Reliance trends
also
 known as Ajio in India is selling the best
quality
 clothes at
cheaper
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 cost which is attracting all the folks to buy from them.
Thus
, by reducing the
prices
 of
products
 profit margin will get reduced but at the same time sale will increase which will be a win-win situation for consumers as they can buy
goods
 at
an affordable
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affordable prices
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prices
 and for the firm because their
products
' demand will be increased.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • disposable goods
  • economic benefits
  • frequent replacements
  • technological adaptation
  • manufacturing affordability
  • environmental responsibility
  • longevity
  • minimize costs
  • wider society
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