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Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People hold conflicting views about whether
universities
 should solely
enroll
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students
 having the highest scores or should accept all youngsters of all ages, even if they did not
study
 well at
school
. In
this
 essay, I am going to elucidate both viewpoints before clarifying my own opinion. It is understandable why all
students
 having the highest marks should be admitted to tertiary
education
 has received widespread endorsement.  One major rationale is that high
school
students
 graduating with flying
colors
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 deserve to get
this
 privilege. To be more specific, top
students
 have to
study
 extremely hard and ceaseless efforts to get the highest achievement which they desire. Unlike their peer, they always have outstanding achievements, which is evidence that they completely reward for their efforts. Another driving factor is that almost
universities
 usually are financially independent of the national budget. If they allow many pupils with low academic performance, they have to struggle and face many problems of budgetary.
By contrast
, youngsters who have high
education
 can totally have the ability to foster the development of quality and reputation in
this
 institution.  Despite the aforementioned benefits, I would opine that concerns regarding all people from all walks of
life
 having the right to get into
universities
 seem more justifiable.
Firstly
, learning is long-term work and lasts forever. Specifically, many old peoples these days still go to
school
 to finish their studies that not have done in the past or
study
 for a master's degree with
study
 who are younger.
This
 is because nowadays the standards of
life
 become increasing and human demand is
also
 enhanced.
Secondly
, admission of all
students
 in the tertiary
school
 regardless of background associated with having free-of-charge higher
education
 may help many pupils with frustrating circumstances to have more opportunities to
study
 at top
universities
 with cutting-edge facilities and many people passionate with
study
having
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 a chance to
enroll
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universities
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.
Hence
, they will
study
 harder and get a higher
score
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 in
study
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. On top of that, after graduating with a tertiary degree, they can easily get well-paid jobs,
as well as
 obtain a better quality of
life
.  In conclusion,
while
 there is no denying that top
students
 should be admitted to
universities
 that offer substantial benefits, I am of the opinion that it will be imprudent to discount the importance of providing privilege for
students
 from all walks of
life
 to
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 in higher
education
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • merit-based
  • competitive environment
  • academic standards
  • innovation
  • diversity
  • mature students
  • equitable
  • inclusive admission policies
  • educational disadvantages
  • holistic admission process
  • extracurricular achievements
  • non-traditional students
  • equal opportunities
  • societal progress
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