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some languages spoken by very few people are losing their importance and may become extinct completely.it is a good or bad development? what are the reasons for this

Language
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 has played a very vital role in Human Civilization. The
world
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 has more
languages
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 than the number of countries, mainly due to several different
culutures
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cultures
 and communities existing over the past few centuries.
However
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, it is seen that some
languages
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 are on the verge of extinction due to not many people speaking
it
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them
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. In my opinion, it is a very negative thing as it
also
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 manifests
death
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the death
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 of the culture associated
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with
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 it.
India
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 is the most diverse country in the
world
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, where its population uses more than 1000
languages
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. Though
India
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 comprises
of
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apply
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29 states, there
are
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is
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 more
number of
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apply
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languages
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 spoken as their origins go to many different civilizations born here. One of the
world
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's oldest
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language
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languages
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 '
sanskrit
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Sanskrit
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' originated in
India
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,
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however
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 it is losing focus as it is not being spoken by a lot of Indians nor taught by most of the schools
of
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in
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India
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.
Similarly
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, there are other
languages
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such
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 as "Persian", etc which are
also
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 near extinction as they are not being widely used.
Moreover
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, some tribes in
India
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 have their own dialects
however
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 due to migration and development
such
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 tribes are disappearing and so is their
language
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. After the
british
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British
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 colonization, in
India
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 and most
of
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parts
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the parts
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 of the
world
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, English became the most
dominated
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dominant
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 medium of communication between societies.
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, most schools in
India
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 and
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world
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the world
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 over started making English
as
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a mandatory and primary
language
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.According to me,
this
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 is one of the biggest reasons that local dialects are dying.
Additionally
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,
i
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 think with the development of the nation, there has been a great migration of people from rural sides to the urban cities. I sight,
this
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 as
also
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 one of the reasons, as to why people
not
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are not
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 able to use their mother tongue as they migrated to different cities for employment purposes. With their
language
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 losing importance, the string associated
to
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with
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 their culture is
also
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 getting weaker and weaker.
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,
i
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 would like to conclude that
language
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have
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 originated as part of
societal
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the societal
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 development of cultures and communities.
However
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, with migration and
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the large
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large scale
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large-scale
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 use of
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English
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english
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the english
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language
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,
i
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I
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 feel it is not just the
language
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 which is losing importance but slowly the cultures associated
to
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with
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 them are
also
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 dying.

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