In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is true that in some
countries
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, some
people
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highly support the
use
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of money largely and mainly on constructing new
railway
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lines
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for very fast
trains
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across the cities.
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, others have
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opinion
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opinions
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of how more urgent it is for some
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to upgrade their existing public transportations rather than spend it on
trains
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construction.
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essay will discuss both perspectives
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to
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why it is more important to spend more money on establishing new
railway
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lines
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high-speed
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trains
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. In many developed
countries
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, their technology in
transportation
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is mainly used
on
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constructing
trains
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. Japan, as an example of one of the most up-to-date
countries
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in the world, has already had so many high-tech fast railways. In fact, the majority of society there
use
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high speed
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high-speed
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trains
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on daily basis.
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rail has been proven to be many times more energy efficient than any other kind of private or public
transportation
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even
for
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the
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apply
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airplanes
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.
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is
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because it can decrease air pollution caused by the
use
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of
transportation
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. Not to mention, riding
high speed
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rails
instead
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of busses will cost a little and more time-saving, so
people
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can get to and from work more efficiently. For
this
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reason, the
people
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there will not mind if the country
spend
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more finances on improving new
railway
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lines
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for high-speed
trains
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between cities.
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, some citizens in developing
countries
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do not really like to
use
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trains
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. The citizens in developing
countries
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still prefer to
use
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cars or motorcycles. The
people
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feel safer and
more-free
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to do their business by travelling by driving cars or riding
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a motorcycle
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motorcycle
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motorcycles
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. In Indonesia,
for instance
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, there are still many flaws
on
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the ordinary rail facilities let alone the
high speed
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one
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. Indonesia only has Bandung-Jakarta fast train. Compared to
Japanese
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, Indonesian will likely choose to improve
another
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other
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public
transportation
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that
are
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already highly used
such
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as
busses
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buses
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so it will be more comfortable. In the end, spending more funds to build new
railway
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lines
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for every train should be more profitable than using it on
another public transportations
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another public transportation
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judging by the effectiveness of the time and money. Not only that, by using fast
trains
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to travel, it is more environmental-friendly.
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, it will be wiser to work up on train development
particularly
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on the fast speed type.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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