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Due to advances in science and technology, the lifestyle of people everywhere in the world has become similar. Is this a positive or a negative development ? "

#advances #science #technology #lifestyle #people #world #development
dear sir, I am jack jhonson and I have been living in
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Los angles and I am
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 reader of your magazine.I used to read your article about city culture which you writing in the topic called 'The city of lights. I have some contrasting
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 about your article which was published
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last
 Frida. To be precise, You mentioned
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pollution and traffic congestion in my home town which I think you have had some misunderstanding. From my
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knowledge
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knowledge
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i
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 would like to point that LA is far better than other cities particularly
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 has been awarded
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 most eco-friendly place in New york times. I have lived there
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 25 years. I am well
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 about the surroundings which have wide
varities
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varieties
 of trees throughout the streets and good atmosphere that everyone can enjoy their evenings.
in addition
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the
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traffic jams.I would like to suggest
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there are other transport options available which
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 more affordable and
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convenient
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convenient
such
 as the metro train service. If you have interest I would like to take you on a small trip with me to my city. so that you can get a clear picture of my environment. Please let me know about your convenient time.
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