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Some people think that exams are a good way of assessing a student’s level. Other people believe that they put unnecessary pressure on young learners and tell us very little about their actual ability. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#people #exams #student’s #level #pressure #learners #ability
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Learning is a complicated process
that is
 needed to many tools for
distincting
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distinction
distinctly
distinctive
 fresher's abilities,
however
, taking an exam can be improved the amount of progress in student's knowledge, but, it may
be become
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 a source of tension among youngers that it
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realy
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really
 not essential for academic education ,
as a result
, I will discuss advantages and disadvantages of
exams
 as a tool for classifying
students
 in levels.
First
,
exams
 have distinct topics for reading
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levels,
in addition
, the real problems in life are not
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in
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 primary, intermediate and advanced, while, solving critical issues need
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real
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 in grades on the paper, so , it will
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 it is a waste of time and energy for
students
 and teachers,but, grades can be used as a motivator for promoting basic knowledge and it is depended on the good functional memory if policymakers will remove a test as a wedge of dividing
students
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 levels
this
 function will
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.
Second
, there are many cheating
method
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 among test takers and it is
important
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the important
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 weakness of the exam and it will
made
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 hardworking
students
 depressed , but, finding a solution for real critical
situation
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 is
an
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 better assessment for learners , alongside, the vast variety of topics must be remembered that will be vanished by finishing a level ,anyway, it is inevitable if there is a good design for a test it
also
 can be a good option to describing a learner. In conclusion, I believe both
exams
 and other
assessment
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assessments
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such
 as research
manuscript
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manuscripts
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 or doing a project are necessary to evaluate the
stenghts
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strengths
strength
 of
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a student
the student
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student
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students
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, so,
school
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the school
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 must change their way of assessment by practical
project
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 and
exams
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