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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #drink #products #levels #sugar #health #people
One of the consequences caused by not eating and drinking healthy food is having health
complication
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.
Moreover
, some individuals are worried
by
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 the fact that many meal and beverage industries are using too much
sugar
on
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in
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 their
products
,
this
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which
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 will lead to disruption in fitness. I completely agree with the idea of giving
higher
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a higher
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price
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prices
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 on
products
 with more
sugar
 in
it
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them
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, so that
the
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society will think twice
buying
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about buying
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 those. Manufactories know that many people are addicted to sweet foods and drinks,
this
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and this
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 has resulted in
mass
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the mass
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 selling of
products
 with high contents of
sugar
. Unfortunately, consuming too much
sugar
 will cause harm. If the level of
sugar
 is great in
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the human’s
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human’s
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 body,
this
 will damage our life because
sugar
 is being converted into fat which resulted in obesity.
Furthermore
, the fat can enter the blood vessels,
then
 the blood’s path will become narrow, and it will cause
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a problem
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problem
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 in the heart circulation. In the end, a body that has greater amount
sugar
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of sugar
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 will be very dangerous, as heart failure will occur. Even though most
persons
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people
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 know those facts,
this
 will not stop them to buy
products
 they like as long as they can afford
it
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them
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. If we set costly
price
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prices
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of
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for
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 some sugary foods and drinks,
this
 way, people will consider not
to buy
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buying
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 them due to economic
issue
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issues
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. With
this
 in mind, healthier
products
 that contain less
sugar
 will be more purchased. Obviously, the change of diet will have a positive effect in the future. In conclusion, I strongly opine sugary
products
 should be charged more in order to
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suppress
supress
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suppress
the
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their
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 consumption of it in daily meals.
By
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this
 method,
health
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the health
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 rate in society will increase, since we will have less access to unhealthy foods.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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