One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

The majority of big urban areas always have

this

one issue regarding

traffic

jams. The main reason for

this

problem is that there are too many

people

reside

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in large towns because they are attached to the

highly

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availability of jobs in cities rather than in suburban areas. To face

this

problem, I believe that the government should promote more about living in other areas by giving many types of high-salary jobs. Many more

people

live in capitals because capital cities provide more jobs and the opportunity to get promoted.

This

happens because almost every person wants to go there to pursue a better career and get a better life.

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, most Indonesians will likely find a job in Jakarta and choose to live there, which will lead to

high-density

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the high-density

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population in Jakarta. Having too many citizens in

this

downtown means the

traffic

will be denser,

furthermore

causing

traffic

jam

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in every corner of

this

large city. Looking

by

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the

people

’s tendency to be attracted by seeing some money-related advantages,

this

issue can be solved by the government by providing well-paid

occupation

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. The government should do more promotion to the society to live in

rural

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area

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by giving more advantages about provided high-salary

job

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.

Therefore

,

people

will consider

to move

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to

the

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smaller city which

provide

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more benefits for their life. To conclude,

people

who are provided high salary

job

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jobs

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in smaller

town

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towns

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choose to reside there because highly paid careers will attract

most

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society

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. They will not care about the locations as long as it will support them economically.

Furthermore

,

this

will have an effect

of

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lesser

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population in the capital. In the end, the

traffic

congestion will decrease gradually

time

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to time.