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Some people go shopping as a form of recreation. It has replaced the other activities that people used to do as hobbies. Is this a positive or negative development? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Nowadays, shopping becomes a trend among youths. Earlier,
people
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 do many activities in their free
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 and now they prefer to do shopping in their free
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. I think it has both positive and negative aspects of
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 trend.
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 essay will discuss my viewpoints in the forthcoming paragraphs.
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,
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 are more aware of new fashion and trends. They get the chance to know about other cultures. Some
people
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 prefer to do window shopping which really makes their mood better.
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, In Newyork, a survey conducted by the Youth association club found that 67% of youths prefer to do shopping to relax.
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, they
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 found that they have less pressure in their life because they feel stress-free after shopping either window or actual.
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,
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 prefer to do shopping to keep their mood happy.
On the other hand
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, I personally believe that there are some drawbacks of doing shopping in leisure
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.
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, most
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 are becoming bankrupt due to excess expenses. They use credit cards to fulfil their needs later on they are not able to pay their bills.
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,
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 do not interact with other hobbies
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 as gardening, playing, cooking and so on. They do not know the values of
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 hobbies in their leisure
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. In malls, they just waste their
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.
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, a survey found that 77% of Indians waste their money on purchasing unnecessary things. They follow their idol and copy them . To conclude, in my opinion, I believe that
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 trend has both positive and negative effects.
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 should spend money on necessary things and they should save it for future purposes.
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