As global trade increase many goods including those we use on daily basis are produced in other countries and have to transported long distance. Do benefits of this trend outweigh disadvantages?

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Global business increasing their productions from other regions which included our daily basis
goods
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. They need to travel a long distance before
arrive
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on our
hand
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. I believe that offshore
production
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could help
reducing
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budgets and
increasing
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increase
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quantity
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the quantity
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of
products
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, and these two advantages far
outweighs
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any potential disadvantages. The downsides of
manufacture
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manufacturing
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overseas might be lead
a
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huge spending
in
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transportations
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transportation
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and hard to control the
quality
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of the
goods
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. In
term
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terms
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of saving
money
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,
companies
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tend to shift their factories and
production
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lines to other
low cost
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countries
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such
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as India,
Vitenam
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Vietnam
and Bangladesh,
result
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in
goods
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have
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to
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travel
traval
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travel
a long journey to their destination. Other than that, since
products
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are manufactured from alternate
countries
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which
also
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means that
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quality
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the quality
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of
products
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are
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not easy to control, the
wrost
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worst
scenarios could be wasted a lot of
money
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due to the lower
quality
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.
However
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, I think these can be avoided. Businesses could produce less technique part from these
countries
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and choose a reasonable transport. On the positive
sides
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side
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,
production
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from other
countries
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can help global
companies
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to cut
cost
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costs
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and enlarge the
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quantity
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number
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of
goods
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. It is no doubt that
lower
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budget is the key for businesses to survive in today's competitive environment. Most
companies
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are willing to spend
money
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to upgrade
products
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rather than put
many
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money
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in
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into
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production
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.
Businesses
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men do care more about
quantity
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far away than
quality
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because of customer satisfaction. I think these could create great advantages for global trade as a whole because
companies
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could devote the
money
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to other aspects of their business development. In conclusion,
although
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offshore manufacturing would result in expensive transportation and
quality
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control issues
i
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believe these downsides are greatly outweighed by the upsides that a huge spending
saving
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savings
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and
quantity
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increasing
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increase
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.
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