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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many companies nowadays would rather have people who had
experience
 with other jobs and customers rather than them having knowledge. I for one agree with
this
 as the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. I will be discussing why I agree
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this
 in the upcoming essay. There are many reasons
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this
 and why I agree as well.
Firstly
, having
experience
 could help in many ways
such
 as knowing how to solve and escape a major problem faced before. Humans with
work
 knowledge could be nervous and don’t know what to do in these types of situations.
In addition
 to that
experience
 could help to
work
 in a very efficient way with customers and co-workers .
Secondly
, individuals without any idea how a job is completed will need training for a long
time
.
This
 can be a waste of
time
 for many organisations that don’t have
time
 to train and pay money for their trainers. To add more, the trainee could fail the training and it could make the money used for them go to waste.
Lastly
, a person who knows what to do
wont
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 need any training as they have done these jobs before. So
this
 could be better for companies as they
wont
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 need to spend
time
 on training them or waste
time
 on useless subjects.
Furthermore
,
this
 would benefit the company by having an intelligent worker who knows his way around, and the
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worker will
 gain even more
experience
 to add up to his
work
time
. Overall, individuals who know what to do in the workforce are better than those who have general
work
 knowledge and no working
time
.
Finally
 , I agree that the benefits are far
more
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that
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drawbacks
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