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Q) Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoid any change. others, however, think that change is always a good thing. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Whether to live a repetitive and stable life, always consisting of the same things, or
enjoying
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 a more dynamic
one
 full of continuous changes, is
a
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 often discussed problem. On
one
 hand, there are people that prefer living in the same place forever, with a stable routine, the same job, and the same hobbies.
This
 choice is often implicitly chosen when an individual does not like stress and it is satisfied with how his life is going.
For instance
, a man who suffers from anxiety, would probably not leave
its
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 current job for
one
 that pays more if there is not a high probability of being hired. It is
therefore
 a lifestyle that comes with
less
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 uncertainties, but
also
 with less stuff to approach, which may lead to
unsatisfaction
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.
On the other
hand
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 we have the others, which may prefer to explore the world and what it provides.
For example
, someone who is confident and really open, despite living in a nice area and having friends, might prefer to leave everything and restart from the beginning on the other side of the globe. It is really clear that
this
 lifestyle makes the
one
 who
are
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 living it able to adapt more easily to new challenges. I personally think that both the way of living
come
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comes
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 with advantages and disadvantages and that there is not a right choice for everyone. Change might be beneficial for some or terrible pain for others. I really like change because of its benefits, which, in my
opinion
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 outweigh the drawbacks. To conclude, change is not always a good thing and it really depends on the personality of each
one
.
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