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Scientific research should be the responsibility of government than commercial organizations . Do you agree or disagree .

#research #responsibility #government #organizations
Expecting a governing body to bear the brute of Research and Development compared to
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profit making
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 establishments is a debatable one. I am inclined to disagree with
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 my decision. Citizens of countries make use of the outcome derived from its
legialation
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 investing heavily into
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 laboratories , employing scientists and
what not
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. If
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For profit
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 organisations rely on the investment of
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country men
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 to function
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effectively
effectivelky
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. After
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 if the outcome is good we all stand to benefit, not the
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governmant
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government
 alone.
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 projects.
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